Outcome 1 (Recursive Process) – Demonstrate the ability to approach writing as a recursive process that requires substantial revision of drafts for content, organization, and clarity (global revision), as well as editing and proofreading (local revision).

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I feel that I have improved in all the areas of my essay. My introductions have more of my voice in them, so I am not relying on summary as much. Where I do have summary, it is more focused. My thesis is more of a funnel, it is broad and then gets more specific to my ideas that I want to talk about in my essay near the end. I have more expansion from my ideas in my paragraphs and I have improved my organization of my ideas, so they make more sense together. My explanations for evidence are much better in the final draft. I introduce the quote or paraphrase with more context and connect it back to the thesis and my own ideas about the topic.

Copy of Essay 3: Draft

Essay 3 – Google Docs: Final

The areas of most substantial change are highlighted in blue.

 As you can see from the writing sample above, I made the final draft much better. I have improved my own revision skills since the first essay. I have been able to better see the areas I need to add more of my voice to and expand on. The free draft for the third essay did not have a lot of ideas in it so it lacked components such as a conclusion and my thesis were not really relevant to the ideas I wanted to talk about. When I used to revise essays before college, I would skip over the big parts such as my ideas coming through and making sure my voice was present. The big components are the first parts I look at now and leave sentence level corrections for last. I paid attention to where I could expand on an idea, where my ideas were clouded by wordy sentences, and making sure I put my voice into each paragraph. This made my essays significantly better.